I do not remember these last few pages when i first went through the chapter could they be new?
And so it begins
Too much hornyface throughout the first 28 pages – previous series more appealing to feelings.
Previous: pride, excitedness, giggles, surprise.
Current: horny, pondering. Anyone would be able to catch her read handed having “secret” thoughts in this scene.
There was a certain naivete to the original, true.
Interesting that one can figure out the difference between pride and hormones in elves. It’s as if they had spent a bit of time banging elves…
D- did you just call them elves? They are clearly halflings!
Halflings, Jeff. They’re halflings. The elves come later.
The elves always come later.